Step 1 of 9 0% complete
Session 2 90 minutes · self-paced

Maintaining Objectivity and Scholarly Distance

This session builds on Session 1 by focusing on tone and perspective. You will learn to establish empirical neutrality, manage point of view, eliminate value-laden language, and build scholarly credibility through balanced framing.

By the end of this session, you will be able to:

  • Apply the third-person point of view as the primary academic convention, while recognising disciplined uses of the first person.
  • Eliminate second-person pronouns (you, yours) to avoid projecting unsubstantiated assumptions onto the reader.
  • Identify and neutralise value-laden, emotional, or hyperbolic vocabulary in scholarly contexts.
  • Reframe critical evaluations of literature using non-judgmental academic phrasing to build scholarly ethos.
Phase 1 15 minutes

The Principle of Scholarly Distance

Illustration of a formal university building with stone columns and steps, with scholars in academic gowns walking at a calm distance, representing scholarly distance and objectivity
🎤 Listen: introducing empirical neutrality

Skip controls become available when the audio information has loaded. A full transcript is available below.

Show transcript

[00:00]
In session one, you learned to sound formal. In this session, you’re going to learn something slightly different, and honestly, slightly harder: how to sound neutral.

[00:12]
Here’s the idea behind empirical neutrality. When you present a finding, your job isn’t to convince the reader that it’s exciting or surprising or important using your own enthusiasm. Your job is to describe what the data actually shows as plainly and directly as possible, and let the evidence itself do the convincing. Think about the difference between saying, “We were thrilled to discover a strong link between the two variables,” and simply saying, “A strong correlation was identified.” The second version doesn’t feel colder because it lacks feeling. It feels more credible because it removes you, the writer, from the equation. The reader isn’t being asked to trust your excitement. They’re being asked to evaluate your evidence.

[00:59]
This is what we mean by scholarly distance. Not detachment from the topic. You can still care deeply about your research, but detachment from the temptation to let your personal reaction do the persuading instead of your findings.

Objective tone requires removing personal emotional investment so that the primary focus remains on empirical evidence, methodology, and logical reasoning. It should not include the writer’s feelings about the topic.

Empirical neutrality

Academic prose presents findings directly and straightforwardly, without hyperbole. The data and the logical structure of the argument should do the persuading, not emotive language or personal enthusiasm.

Why distance builds trust

A reader who senses personal bias or emotional investment starts to question whether the writer selected evidence fairly. Scholarly distance signals that conclusions follow from the data rather than from what the writer wanted to find. This does not mean writing has to sound cold or lifeless. It just means removing anything that reveals the writer’s personal stake in the outcome.

Emotionally investedScholarly distance
“This amazing result proves our theory.”“This result supports the proposed theory.”
“Sadly, the data didn’t support our hopes.”“The data did not support the hypothesis.”
“We were thrilled to discover a strong link.”“A strong correlation was identified.”
Check: which sentence demonstrates scholarly distance?

Quick swap bank: emotive words and neutral alternatives

Emotive or exaggeratedNeutral alternative
amazing, incredible, fantasticnotable, significant, substantial
terrible, awful, disastrousunfavourable, poor, inadequate
shocking, surprisingunexpected, unanticipated
proves, shows beyond doubtsupports, indicates, suggests
obviously, clearly, of course(delete, or show the evidence instead)
a huge increasea substantial increase, an increase of 40 per cent
unfortunately, sadly(delete, and state the fact)

Extra practice

Check 2: which sentence is more objective?
Check 3: which sentence is more objective?
Check 4: which sentence is more objective?
Check 5: which sentence is more objective?
Check 6: which sentence is more objective?
Check 7: which sentence is more objective?
Practice 1: rewrite the sentence to remove the emotive and exaggerated language.

“This is a really amazing discovery that will totally change medicine.”

Practice 2: rewrite the sentence to remove the writer’s feelings.

“Unfortunately, the experiment failed.”

Practice 3: rewrite the sentence so that it evaluates the evidence, not the authors.

“The authors’ brilliant analysis clearly shows that sleep affects memory.”

Practice 4: spot the problem. List the emotive or exaggerated words in this sentence.

“The shocking results of this terrible policy clearly prove how dangerous it is.”

Practice 5: rewrite the short paragraph in a neutral, scholarly tone.

“We were thrilled to find that students loved the new app. Sadly, a few people said it was boring. Obviously, the app is a total success.”

Phase 2 25 minutes

Point of View and Perspective Rules

The third-person standard

Writing in the third person (the study, researchers, the findings, the data) keeps the focus on the research phenomenon rather than on the individual writer. This is the default convention for most academic prose.

Eliminating second-person pronouns

Second-person pronouns (you, yours) are strictly excluded from academic prose. They project assumptions onto the reader and sound overly casual, as if the writer is speaking directly to one person rather than presenting findings to a scholarly audience.

Second-person (avoid)Third-person (academic)
“You can see the results improve over time.”“The results improve over time.”
“If you look closely, the trend is obvious.”“A closer examination reveals a clear trend.”
“Your understanding of the topic will deepen.”“Understanding of the topic is deepened.”

Disciplined first-person usage

The rules on first person have shifted over time. Traditionally, personal pronouns (I, we) were discouraged entirely, to maintain complete impersonality. Modern style guides take a more nuanced view.

Modern conventions (APA 7th / CMOS 18th)

First-person pronouns are now permitted when describing specific, active methodological choices — for example, “We interviewed 40 participants” or “I coded the transcripts independently.” This is especially common in co-authored empirical research where the researchers’ actions need to be described clearly.

Unacceptable first-person usage

Expressions of unverified belief or personal feeling remain prohibited regardless of style guide — for example, “I feel that…” or “In my personal opinion…”. These phrases signal subjective conviction rather than evidence-based conclusion.

Check 1: which use of “we” is acceptable in modern academic writing?
Check 2: rewrite this sentence to remove the second-person pronoun.

“When you read the transcript, you notice how often participants mentioned stress.”

Quick swap bank: from personal to scholarly phrasing

Personal or directScholarly alternative
you can see that …Table 1 shows that … / it can be seen that …
you should note that …it should be noted that …
if you compare the groups …a comparison of the groups reveals …
I think / I feel / I believe …the evidence suggests that … / it can be argued that …
in my opinion …the findings indicate that …
we were surprised that …the result was unexpected …

Check the guidelines. Modern style guides allow “I” and “we” for describing what the researchers did, but some disciplines, journals and instructors still prefer an impersonal style. Always follow the guidelines of your target journal or course.

Extra practice

Check 3: which sentence is acceptable in academic writing?
Check 4: which use of “I” is acceptable in modern academic writing?
Check 5: which sentence is acceptable in academic writing?
Check 6: which sentence is acceptable in academic writing?
Check 7: which use of “we” is acceptable in modern academic writing?
Check 8: which sentence is acceptable in academic writing?
Practice 1: rewrite the sentence to remove the second-person pronoun.

“You can see from Table 1 that sales increased.”

Practice 2: rewrite the sentence to remove the personal opinion.

“I think the results are not reliable because the sample was small.”

Practice 3: rewrite the sentence to remove the personal opinion.

“In my opinion, the policy should be changed.”

Practice 4: decide which sentences are acceptable.

(a) “I analysed the data using statistical software.” (b) “I believe the results are amazing.” (c) “We feel this is the best method.” (d) “We randomly assigned participants to two groups.”

Practice 5: spot the problems, then rewrite the sentence.

“We interviewed 40 teachers, and I feel they were honest, so you can trust the findings.”

Practice 6: rewrite the short paragraph in an academic style.

“When you look at the survey, you will notice that most students liked the course. I feel the teachers did an excellent job. In my opinion, you should keep the course. We sent the survey to 300 students.”

Phase 3 20 minutes

Eliminating Value-Laden and Emotive Language

🎤 Listen: eliminating value-laden language

Skip controls become available when the audio information has loaded. A full transcript is available below.

Show transcript

[00:00]
In the previous phase, you looked at point of view. Who is doing the speaking in an academic text? Now we’re looking at another way writers accidentally reveal themselves: the words they use to judge a finding, a method, or another researcher.

[00:15]
Most value-laden language feels harmless when we write it. Words like obviously, terrible, disastrous, or revolutionary often appear because we want the reader to understand how strongly we feel. But in academic writing, that reaction creates a problem. It asks the reader to accept your judgment before they’ve seen the evidence.

[00:38]
Take the phrase, “Smith foolishly ignored key economic variables.” It sounds decisive, but it makes a claim about Smith’s intelligence or motivation, neither of which the evidence can prove. Compare it with, “Smith’s model does not account for key economic variables.” The criticism is still there. In fact, it is more precise. But it focuses on what the model does, not on what we think of the person who made it.

[01:06]
This is the principle to carry through the next activities: Don’t remove criticism, remove the personal judgment. Your job is to identify the limitation, state it accurately, and let the reader decide how serious it is. As you work through the examples, look for the difference between a claim about the evidence and a claim about the researcher. That distinction is at the heart of scholarly neutrality.

Subjective adjectives and adverbs undermine scientific neutrality, even when they are not technically inaccurate. Words like revolutionary, disastrous, obviously, terrible, and genius insert the writer’s judgement where the evidence should speak for itself.

Value-ladenNeutral
obviously(often removable, or: “the data indicate”)
disastrousunsuccessful / did not meet expectations
completely overlookeddid not address
revolutionarynotable / significant
foolishly ignoreddoes not account for

Neutralising literature critiques

When evaluating opposing studies or identifying research gaps, aggressive or emotional verbs must be replaced with neutral academic phrasing. This is one of the most common places writers unintentionally reveal bias, because critique invites strong language.

Biased / judgmental: “Gerard completely overlooked the data.”
Neutral academic: “Gerard did not address the data.”

Biased / judgmental: “Smith foolishly ignored key economic variables.”
Neutral academic: “Smith’s model does not account for key economic variables.”

Check: identify the value-laden word in this sentence. “The researcher’s disastrous methodology completely undermined the study.”
Practice: neutralise this critique.

“Patel’s terrible analysis completely ignored the most obvious confounding variables.”

More value-laden words and neutral alternatives

Value-ladenNeutral
groundbreaking, brilliantnotable, well designed (only if the evidence shows it)
ridiculous, absurd, stupidinconsistent with the data, not supported by the evidence
awful, uselessof limited use, unfavourable
totally, completely, utterly(delete)
proves, is clearly wrongis not supported by the evidence

Neutral frames for critique

“X does not account for …”
“X is limited by …”
“X did not examine …”
“It remains unclear whether …”
“The evidence is mixed / inconclusive.”
“Although X reported …, the small sample limits the generalisability of the findings.”

Extra practice (optional)

Check 2: which sentence is more neutral?
Check 3: which sentence is more neutral?
Check 4: which sentence is more neutral?
Check 5: which sentence is more neutral?
Check 6: which sentence is more neutral?
Check 7: which sentence is more neutral?
Practice 1: neutralise this sentence.

“Smith’s ridiculous model totally ignores climate data.”

Practice 2: neutralise this sentence.

“This groundbreaking study proves that sleep is vital for memory.”

Practice 3: neutralise this sentence.

“The company’s catastrophic decision to cut research funding ruined the programme.”

Practice 4: spot the value-laden words, then rewrite the sentence.

“The authors’ foolish sampling strategy produced awful, useless data.”

Practice 5: rewrite the critique in a neutral academic style.

“Jones is clearly wrong. His terrible experiment totally failed to control for age, and his conclusions are absurd.”

Practice 6: write one balanced sentence that acknowledges a result and a limitation.

A study reported a 15% productivity gain, but it surveyed only 45 employees.

Phase 4 15 minutes

Building Scholarly Ethos Through Balanced Framing

Constructing ethos

Acknowledging valid alternative viewpoints or limitations presents an image of an unbiased, rigorous thinker. A writer who only ever dismisses opposing views looks less credible than one who engages with them fairly.

Avoid dismissive polarities

Presenting counter-evidence with professional respect strengthens the writer’s intellectual credibility rather than weakening the thesis. Dismissing an opposing study outright, without engaging with its actual claims, tends to make an argument look defensive rather than confident.

DismissiveBalanced, credible framing
“Lee’s flawed study is completely wrong about this.”“Lee’s findings differ from those reported here, possibly due to differences in sample size.”
“This outdated theory has no relevance today.”“This theory has been challenged by more recent findings, though it remains influential in the field.”
Check 1: which sentence builds stronger scholarly ethos?
Check 2: which sentence acknowledges a limitation without weakening the overall argument?
Check 3: which reporting verb treats an alternative view with appropriate scholarly respect?
Practice: rewrite this dismissive statement as a balanced academic sentence.

“This theory is obviously wrong, and the people who still support it are ignoring the facts.”

Balanced framing phrases

“Although X …, Y …”
“While X suggests …, Y indicates …”
“X offers a useful starting point; however, …”
“These findings differ from those of X, possibly because of …”
“X has been questioned by more recent work, though it remains influential.”
“Despite its limitations, X provides preliminary evidence for …”

Extra writing practice

Practice 1: rewrite the dismissive sentence in a balanced, academic way.

“Kim’s study is garbage because it only had 20 people.”

Practice 2: rewrite the dismissive sentence in a balanced, academic way.

“Only a fool would still believe the old theory.”

Practice 3: rewrite the sentence so that it treats the earlier study with respect.

“Davis says remote work is great, but he’s totally wrong because his data is old.”

Practice 4: rewrite the sentence without claiming that others are wrong.

“My results prove that the other researchers are wrong.”

Practice 5: rewrite the sentence with a respectful reporting verb.

“Singh wrongly claims that class size has no effect on results.”

Practice 6: write one sentence that acknowledges a limitation without weakening your argument.

Your survey had a low response rate (22%), but the results were consistent with earlier studies.

Practice 7: write one balanced sentence that presents two opposing findings fairly.

Park (2020) found that online classes improved grades. Wu (2022) found no effect.

Practice 8: rewrite the short paragraph with a balanced, scholarly tone.

“Everyone knows the old method is useless. Nguyen’s team was stupid to use it. Our new method is obviously much better, so no one should use the old one.”

Practice 15 minutes

Neutralisation Workshop

Transform each biased or inappropriately phrased sentence into neutral, objective academic prose. Apply everything from this session: remove second-person address, eliminate value-laden language, and adjust point of view.

1. “When you look at the results, you can obviously see that the new policy was a complete disaster.”
2. “Johnson’s terrible study completely overlooked the most important cultural factors.”
3. “In my personal opinion, I think that renewable energy is obviously superior to fossil fuels.”
Assignment Homework

Objectivity and Perspective Audit

Rewrite the passage below as an objective, third-person paragraph that maintains scholarly distance. Remove personal bias, second-person address, emotional adjectives, and subjective criticism, replacing them with non-judgmental evaluation frames.

“In my opinion, you can clearly see that Martinez’s groundbreaking study on urban transport was absolutely brilliant, while Delgado’s disastrous follow-up completely overlooked the most obvious flaws in the original data. I feel that if you look at the numbers yourself, you’ll obviously agree that Delgado foolishly ignored key demographic variables that any careful researcher would have noticed. You really have to wonder how such a terrible oversight made it into a published paper. We were shocked by how badly the second team handled such a promising line of research, and honestly, their sloppy work has completely undermined confidence in the whole project. It’s a shame, because you can tell the original idea had real potential before it was ruined by careless analysis.”
Takeaway Reference sheet

Session 2 Summary Sheet

Download a one-page PDF summarising the point-of-view rules, value-laden vocabulary swaps, and ethos-building guidelines from this session.

Session 2: Maintaining Objectivity and Scholarly Distance

Point of view rules · value-laden language swaps · neutral critique framing · ethos guidelines

The same summary is available below as HTML. The PDF has not been verified as a tagged, accessible document.

Read the summary on this page

1. Scholarly distance and empirical neutrality

Let the data and the logic of the argument do the persuading. Remove anything that reveals your personal stake in the outcome. Distance does not mean cold writing; it builds trust, because readers see that conclusions follow from the evidence.

Emotionally invested and scholarly-distance versions
Emotionally investedScholarly distance
“This amazing result proves our theory.”“This result supports the proposed theory.”
“Sadly, the data didn’t support our hopes.”“The data did not support the hypothesis.”
“We were thrilled to discover a strong link.”“A strong correlation was identified.”

2. Point of view rules

Point of view: what to avoid and what to use
AvoidUse instead
You / your / yoursthe study / researchers / the data
“You can see that …”“Table 1 shows that …” / “It can be seen that …”
“If you compare the groups …”“A comparison of the groups reveals …”
“I feel / I think / I believe …”“The evidence suggests that …” / “It can be argued that …”
“In my personal opinion …”Remove; state the evidence-based conclusion directly
Acceptable: “We interviewed 40 participants.”First person is allowed for what the researchers did (APA 7th / CMOS 18th)

Check the guidelines of your target journal, course or instructor: some still prefer an impersonal style.

3. Value-laden language swaps

Value-laden words and neutral alternatives
Value-ladenNeutral
amazing, incredible, groundbreaking, revolutionarynotable, significant, substantial
terrible, awful, disastrousunfavourable, poor, unsuccessful
shocking, surprisingunexpected, unanticipated
proves, is clearly wrongsupports, indicates, suggests; is not supported by the evidence
obviously, clearly, totally, completely(delete, or show the evidence instead)
unfortunately, sadly(delete, and state the fact)
ridiculous, absurd, uselessinconsistent with the data; of limited use
completely overlooked / foolishly ignoreddid not address / does not account for

4. Neutral frames for critiquing studies

  • “X does not account for …” “X is limited by …” “X did not examine …”
  • “It remains unclear whether …” “The evidence is mixed / inconclusive.”
  • “Although X reported …, the small sample limits the generalisability of the findings.”

Biased: “Gerard completely overlooked the data.”

Neutral: “Gerard did not address the data.”

5. Building scholarly ethos through balanced framing

Acknowledge valid alternative viewpoints and limitations rather than dismissing them outright. Presenting counter-evidence with professional respect strengthens credibility rather than weakening the thesis.

Dismissive and balanced framing
DismissiveBalanced, credible framing
“Lee’s flawed study is completely wrong about this.”“Lee’s findings differ from those reported here, possibly due to differences in sample size.”
“This outdated theory has no relevance today.”“This theory has been challenged by more recent findings, though it remains influential in the field.”

Balanced framing phrases:

  • “Although X …, Y …” “While X suggests …, Y indicates …”
  • “X offers a useful starting point; however, …” “These findings differ from those of X, possibly because of …”
  • “X has been questioned by more recent work, though it remains influential.” “Despite its limitations, X provides preliminary evidence for …”

Example transformation

Biased: “When you look at the results, you can obviously see that the new policy was a complete disaster.”

Neutral: “An examination of the results indicates that the implemented policy did not achieve its intended outcomes.”

Self-check before you submit

  • No you / your, and no “I feel”, “I think” or “in my opinion”.
  • No emotive adjectives, intensifiers or exaggerated verbs (amazing, terrible, obviously, proves).
  • Critique targets the evidence and method, not the researchers.
  • Limitations and alternative views are acknowledged fairly.
  • First person, if used, only describes what the researchers did.

Session 2 complete

You have covered scholarly distance, point of view, value-laden language, and ethos-building through balanced framing. Download your takeaway summary any time from the previous step.